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Aftiel was a quiet one. While others of our kind proclaimed their worship in trumpet calls and bursts of song, she would be out on one of Aerie’s many balconies, simply humming softly to herself and to our Lord.

To this day, I still am unsure what drew my attention to her.  She was not as beautiful as many of our kind.  Not exotic as fierce Ariel, nor so alluring as solemn Uriel. And, she was hardly as brilliantly shining as me.

She was merely Aftiel, angel of twilight.  

Perhaps, I merely desired to understand her.  What were her fondest wishes, her deepest desires… her darkest sins?  Yes, that likely caused my fascination.  After all, we were merely angelic in nature, not saintly, and each of us had our own personal sin.  Anael’s love was often overcome with lust; Michael’s righteous anger burned to dark wrath.  My own joy in my Lord’s regard soured into the pride that was my downfall.

But what sin did she claim?  As long as I knew and loved her, I never did discover that, and after my long fall, I believed I never would, that she was somehow free of sin, itself.

Yet, there she stands, a quiet beauty surrounded by her fellow fallen deep in Hell.  I have asked her many times what she has been sentenced for, but she never tells me truly.

She merely claims, “I asked to come.”  Then she smiles at me, and begins to softly hum that now familiar psalm, and I begin to do something quite dangerous here.

I begin to pray for her future.
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I was stained, with a role, in a day not my own
But as you walked into my life you showed what needed to be shown
And I always knew, what was right I just didn't know that I might
Peel away and choose to see with such a different sight

And I will never see the sky the same way and
I will learn to say good-bye to yesterday and
I will never cease to fly if held down and
I will always reach too high cause I've seen, I've seen, twilight


Twilight- Vanessa Carlton

There has always been something hauntingly soothing to the song "Twilight." It hints at a moment of redemption, of the feeling of wings being spread. It's that song that I listen too when I feel truly hopeless.

It seems fitting that I write a story based on it from my Lucifer's perspective. Aftiel is indeed the name given to the Angel of Twilight- though little else is ever mentioned about her. I see her as the soothing of the day, and the embrace of night. I can imagine her quiet soul utterly confusing poor Luc.

Am I cruel in that I enjoy his confusion?

Still, it is dedicated only to twilight Aftiel.

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I really enjoyed this piece of writing and think you made a good choice by telling it from Lucifer's perspective.

Your description of Aftiel humming quietly to herself paints a beautiful picture of her. The use of that description again at the end of this piece is very effective and rounds off the story.

"After all, we were merely angelic in nature, not saintly, and each of us had our own personal sin." - I especially enjoyed this idea from Lucifer's perspective.

"I still am unsure " - I would probably change this to I am still unsure. It just made me stumble each time I read it.

"sin, itself" - the comma can be removed.

Overall, this was an entertaining read and I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Ooh, I liked it. She sounds really interesting.
Lucifer is a cool name XD

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Thanks hon!

*grin* Isn't it though? lol.. and yes it's meant to be THAT Lucifer...lol

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Even better! :#1:

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Oh, very nice. I like the theme you've played with here. It's a pretty little snapshot. The closing bit about Lucifer praying for her future was very nice.

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I love that song. Good luck for the contest =D

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*hug* Yeah me too.. thanks so much!

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Thanks so much!

Yeah, it's an interesting perspective to think about for me.. I've put my Luc in a couple odd situations like that.. forced to think about hope whether he wants too or not lol

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Wow. This is beautiful.

I loved all of it really - especially the viewpoint from which it was written! :heart:

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*hug* Thanks sweetie!

Yeah, Lucifer as my drunken confused muse tends to make life interesting.. lol At the very least I get to play with some odd perspectives lol

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Welcome! :glomp:

Indeed, I think it's really clever :D

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