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Tiny toys and silver hands are
All I have for holding.
Broken smiles and empty arms
Are all too often folding.

Little children play their games, but
I shall never join them.
Like falling snowflakes all the same
So I cannot feel for them.

If I
Never see the
Sky, then
How would I find
One friend?
When might I be free?

Day light
Sinks inside the
Cold night;
Even stars hold
Back light.
How else can I be?


Daddy says the winter’s never
Lonely when you’re smiling.
Still smiling’s always harder now
That I’ve no hope of flying.

If he never comes back home
I’ll never feel like family.
Daddy’s gone and I’m alone,
I’d follow him now, gladly.

If I
Never see the
Sky then
How could I find
One friend?
When might I be free?

Day light
Sinks inside the
Cold night;
Even stars hold
Back light.
How else can I be?


Now the winter’s getting colder;
So too am I, inside.
Still, I pray as I get older,
Maybe hope might not die.

If I
Never see the
Sky then
How could I find
One friend?
When might I be free?

Day light
Sinks inside the
Cold night;
Even stars hold
Back light.
How else can I be?
©2008-2009 *HiddenCaitastrophe
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Author's Comments

Well this little prize piece ended up surprising me.

It was planned to be a story based on [link] by *ColdCity Instead, I found myself humming this eerie little song.

Definitely tried for that tragic feel from "Memory" from "Cats." No clue if I actually reached it lol.

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Lovely rhythm. :love:

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Thanks my dear! It took a while to make it work right lol.

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This is really beautiful. :heart:

This verse really touched me:

Daddy says the winter’s never
Lonely when you’re smiling.
Still smiling’s always harder now
That I’ve no hope of flying.


So sad! :tears: I think you've done a great job on this.. You really did reach the tragic feel..

Nice job! :love:

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*big hug* I'm so glad you enjoyed it my dear... it's kinda weird for me.. I think I like it.. but it does get me feeling a bit down lol

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Well I think that perhaps that's what it should do. It's not a happy poem, so it'd be strange if you felt sparkly whilst reading it! :D

I think that shows you've really got it right here, from the way it makes you feel. And others too, it definitely made me sad.

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*hug* Yeah, I think you're right!

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Very awesome. I love all of your songs, they make me want to sing XD

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*hug* That's prolly the best compliment I can get for my lyrics! Thanks hon!

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^_^

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